This is a finalist in the challenge Belinda, Rick, and Hope!

Keys, Parking Lots, Handcuffs

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Keys, Parking Lots, Handcuffs

After knocking Mrs. Fox cold, Rick presents an interesting solution for escape.



INT. MOTEL ROOM. NIGHT.

MRS. FOX lays prostrate on the floor, her legs askew and spilling out into the main room. A moment, then HOPE walks over and gives her mother a tentative kick. BELINDA is watching over her charge. She glimpses out of her periphery; RICK reaching out towards Mrs. Fox. She grabs his hand.

BELINDA

Don't touch her!

RICK

I was going to move her to the radiator. We've got a pair of handcuffs downstairs for the rowdies, and I was going to stop her from—

BELINDA

Don't. Don't move her, don't restrain her, just...leave her be. It'll just make her more angry.

RICK

And I guess we don't want that.

BELINDA

No. No, you don't want that.

Hope has wandered over to the door. She places her hand against it, and then looks back at Belinda.

BELINDA

She's right. We should be running.

RICK

Awesome. I love road trips. Where are we going?

BELINDA

You shouldn't get involved. She'll ask questions, and the less you know the better.

RICK

You're not going to get anywhere on foot. Look, I'll get one of the cars in the lot, and we'll drive out a few miles, and you can run from there. I won't know where you are. No idea. Big old blank up here. Not a single thing that I can—

BELINDA

Okay! Yes, all right. Just...stop that and you can come.

All three of them run DOWNSTAIRS to the parking lot. Belinda glances down the row of cars.

RICK

All right.

BELINDA

So which one is yours?

RICK

I walk to work.

BELINDA

We're going to steal a car?

RICK

It's not stealing if they give you the keys.

From his pocket RICK pulls a ring of car keys.

RICK

We make 'em surrender when they check in. Make sure they don't sneak off.

BELINDA

Only makes sense.

Hope smiles. She's got her eye on something across the way. She points, and Belinda and Rick look over towards her mark: sports car, black finish. Looks fast.

RICK

I think we have our answer. I'll drive.

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shangrilaphil
Dec 04, 2008 07:36PM
Excellent usage of the word "askew!"
r.milo
Dec 04, 2008 02:20PM
lol, it's not stealing if they give you the keys!! hhahaaaaaaaaa :D

like every finalist story has "hope smiles" weirddd

the title sounds very kinky...hahhahaha
itschavez
Dec 05, 2008 02:00PM
i know >_<
kitenn
Dec 03, 2008 02:36PM
Great idea! I have actually stayed at one of those hotels... Classy joints.
mphazard
Dec 03, 2008 02:55AM
Remind me to never stay in a hotel that confiscates your keys. I imagine Rick has had a few Ferris Bueller moments with those vehicles.
andykin
Dec 04, 2008 10:05PM
Hahaha, yeeeah. XD
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Details

Posted By: jimmyrabbitte
Published: Dec 02, 2008
Honors: Finalist Submission: Keys, Parking Lots, Handcuffs Dec 04, 2008

Challenge

Write a specific (see details) one page scene for Ogy, Nelson and Emily to act out during our holiday Q&A.

Summary

After knocking Mrs. Fox cold, Rick presents an interesting solution for escape.

Tags

cars, rick, hope, belinda, keys, parking lot, mrs fox, escape, jokes, skipping out on the bill

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